Houses that come in a variety of different shapes, colors, and sizes stand tall like soldiers on the front line. Middle schoolers flood the area daily and sometimes nightly creating a kid and car filled landscape. Dog lovers stroll up and down the streets with their beloved seeking shade from the scorching Missouri sun.
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ReplyDeleteYou did a really good job describing your neighborhood. I liked all of your vivid details and descriptions.
ReplyDeletehas a lot of detail about the different houses and the sun
ReplyDeleteYou described the places with everything that you see everyday and I love how you did that so we know how your neighborhood is.
ReplyDeleteThe paragraph was very detailed and descriptive. I liked the use of colorful verbs and adjectives.
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptions, I can image what is happening in your neighborhood.
ReplyDeletecolorful verbs
ReplyDeleteI like how you used colorful verbs to describe your neighborhood.
ReplyDeleteYou did excellent describing how your neighborhood is and what you see
ReplyDeletenice metaphor
ReplyDeleteHas very good details
ReplyDeleteI liked the metaphor at the end.
ReplyDeleteYou used colorful worlds, and good metaphors. Although you had metaphor back on metaphor and Mr. Wickham said that's not good to do
ReplyDeletethe sentences are put well and great wording
ReplyDeleteI like where the first sentence how the houses were described as soldiers
ReplyDeleteI liked how she is referenced the neighborhood to other thing using the details.
ReplyDeleteI noticed you used a simile when describing the houses in your neighborhood
ReplyDeleteI think she had lots of details and used lots of the tools we learned
ReplyDeleteI really like your descriptive adjectives like "scorching sun"
ReplyDeleteThe imagery is very vivid, and it was easy for me to visualize your neighborhood. But I felt a little lost, at some parts you needed to be a bit more articulate.
ReplyDeleteGood personification in the first sentence
ReplyDeletegood imagery
ReplyDeleteI loved the details you used in your first sentence.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you described the middle school kids flooding the street and at night which helped me imagine the kids walking at night together with passing cars.
ReplyDeleteReferring to the houses as soldiers helped me picture them all in neat rows.
ReplyDeleteyou could've just said their were houses with color but instead u used your create sentence
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ReplyDeleteI think your best sentence is the first one.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery is good and there is a lot of relevant details.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you put everyone and everything in your story
ReplyDeleteI like how you used personification in the first sentence.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used colorful verbs to describe your neighborhood
ReplyDeleteI like how you talked about the dog lovers strolling up the street and the detail you put in the whole 3 sentences.
ReplyDeleteThe personification in the first sentence is really good
ReplyDeleteGreat imagry, love the simile in the first sentence
ReplyDeleteI like all of your amazing details about your neighborhood and the Missouri Sun.
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ReplyDeleteI think it was descriptive
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